The Vocals Were Mediocre...
You know, this would be an EXCELLENT song if the vocals were at the appropriate level. It seemed like some of the consonants "popped" the mic... maybe it would be fixed if the mic was farther away and you just turned it up when you mixed it? Also, the lyrics were a bit generic, not to be overly critical of the song, because it was a good cut, it just sounds like every mix tape I ever bought from someone on the corner in Philly. Maybe a bit more inspired lyrics and the problem with the pop sounds in the mic and you would have a hip hop cut that is extraordinary in comparison to the other songs in the audio portal, but for right now, its still better than most, but could be much better.